Today starts the 2nd Annual Flash Fiction Blogfest hosted by Cherie Reich. It was a blast writing flash fiction, and with a limit of only 300 words it was also a big challenge.
The flash fiction I wrote was inspired by the song, Old Ways by Loreena McKennitt. Feel Free to watch it here. It is one of my all-time favorite songs.
The flash fiction I wrote was inspired by the song, Old Ways by Loreena McKennitt. Feel Free to watch it here. It is one of my all-time favorite songs.
Also just a note: the story does have a love scene (written in figurative language).
Surrender to the Sea
Lightning flashed.
Memories flood my mind. The night we met was just like this. A storm took over the sky with cracks of lightning and thunder that thrashed with the waves of the sea.
I was crying by the shore when you came.
Your voice carried on waves of thunder as you sang to my war-torn heart. I saw the silhouette of a man, broad and muscled, standing on the beach in the pouring rain.
I met your gaze boldly, reaching for you. Your blue eyes were dark with desire. Kisses like pearls tasted of the sea. You drowned me with your hot mouth and the salt tang of your skin. The surf drummed the echo of my heartbeat. My blood surged, and crested as your heat crashed into me. Our bodies shared an ancient rhythm, rocking in fervent melody. As the crescendo reached its peak, my head lifted to the storm. You joined me, hard and shuddering, sending ripples through my body. We held each other close until the glittering dawn.
“Come with me.” You urged me toward the morning waves. Your voice was ragged and low. But I broke away, tears sliding down my sandy cheeks. I could not leave my world behind.
Now, those memories pull me closer to the roaring depths. The waves beckon, calling my name. They say I belong with them, with you. I clamber my way to the seashore and gaze over the rolling hills of water. Will you be there?
I dive into the furious sea. The current pulls and thrusts, swallows me. I am rushing toward the sharp rocks.
You catch me in the net of your arms and plunge into the deep. My heart shatters with joy. I’m alive.
Anchored to you I am home. I’m finally home.
You already know what I think, but I'll say it again.
ReplyDeleteIT ROCKS!
Awwwww, thanks Juliana!
DeleteThere's a nice poetry to the language with this one.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Stu :)
DeleteOooo... *swoon* Verrrry fun. Love the mood surrounding your words. ;)
ReplyDeleteThank you Morgan :)
DeleteHoly crap this is good--I just cannot say that enough! :D
ReplyDeleteYay!! Appreciated.
DeleteAndrea
Loved this! I really like the edits you made, and the new title rocks :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for the help and for the nice comment :)
DeleteThe descriptions are so very lyrical and drew me in right away. Thanks for posting.
ReplyDeleteThanks Summer! It was fun reading your piece as well. This was a great blog fest.
DeleteIntense and moving. Good job!
ReplyDeleteThanks! :)
DeleteBeautiful! You can write your booty off, Andrea!
ReplyDeleteI wish I could write it off, I would do a lot more writing if it meant I didn't have to exercise :)
DeleteAndrea
Haha. You're silly.
DeleteChilling and ethereal. Is she dead and in "his" arms; is she really saved; is she even imagining/hallucinating the whole thing? Very dream-like.
ReplyDeleteNice work.
Thanks, I appreciate it!
DeleteGreat story and lovely writing. I'm so curious about this sea-man she fell in love with. I'm glad he was there when she went back. :)
ReplyDeleteBest of luck!
Thanks! Yeah, I couldn't help but write a happy ending of sorts.
DeleteWow that was steamy! It's nice that you've gone in a very different direction with this. Great piece.
ReplyDeletethank you, and please write more of that cat-person romance.. Love it!
DeleteWonderfully written. I do like the changes you made. Just the little bit makes all the difference. Good luck! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Christine! :)
DeleteLove the imagery. :)
ReplyDelete<3 <3 <3
DeleteThank you!
Beautiful! Goodness... Have you ever considered being a lyricist?
ReplyDeleteI never thought of lyricist before.. that would be fun! Unfortunately I have no musical talent.
DeleteAndrea
Some really incredible writing.
ReplyDelete~MPL, PepperWords
Thanks so much!
DeleteAlso, I went to your blog, but couldn't find a way to comment on it.
Andrea
Had to read it several times....this could definitely be part of a longer story. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks Donna! I would love to write a longer story based on this.
DeleteAndrea
Thank you for hosting this, Cherie. It was a lot of fun.
ReplyDeleteI love the passion!
ReplyDeleteThanks! :)
DeleteOofta! Now I've *got* to learn how to swim! :-)
ReplyDeleteSome Dark Romantic
Thank you Mina! :)
DeleteBeautiful, melodic writing. Loved it. :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Misha :)
DeleteSuch powerful emotions and imagery! Great flash!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Michael!
DeleteWow, very passionate! Great job!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful prose.
ReplyDeleteThanks Von!
DeleteThis is beauty! I wanted to go with her.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much!
DeleteWow wow, this is so romantic. Beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteThank you Mary :)
DeleteWonderful imagery. I love how you have this beautiful love scene without being explicit. Well, it kind of is, but it says love not sex. Did that make sense?
ReplyDeleteLove that he caught her.
Thank you, that was exactly what I was going for!
DeleteGood use of emotion!
ReplyDeleteThanks Allison!
DeleteBeautiful. The song, the writing and the story.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful like a ballad and thankfully a happy ending.
ReplyDeleteThank you! Yes, I love happy endings!
DeleteOh, I really like how, at the end, she feels alive when she could be plunging to her death. Nicely done. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much!! I wasn't sure if I should have left more mystery to her being alive or not.
DeleteThis is great. Very different from some of the other stories out there.
ReplyDeleteLove the range of emotions in your entry... and of course a happy ending is always nice!
ReplyDeleteI love happy endings too, thanks for the compliments.
DeleteThis was so romantic and dream-like and despite my fear of the ocean, I really enjoyed this piece. Bravo! (:
ReplyDeleteI did not know you fear the ocean, glad that you enjoyed this anyways :)
Deletewow that was beautiful, highly emotional and so happy. I really loved this. Good luck!
ReplyDeletehighly emotional and sappy is my thing! :)
DeleteLove the line “Kisses like pearls tasted of the sea.” Aww, I love how it ended. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI'll announce the finalists tomorrow!
Thanks you Cherie. I will check your site tomorrow. I do not envy your job in having to pick the finalists.. so many great stories to choose from!
DeleteAndrea
beautiful sadness and loss. moving piece!
ReplyDeleteThanks :)
DeleteInteresting twist open to interpretation, catches your attention
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot :)
DeleteI love your way with words, that was amazing :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, I really tried :)
DeleteOh, Andrea - thou hast been tagged with the Lucky 7 Meme! Click here to read all about it! :-)
ReplyDeleteThis is a beautiful, haunting piece. :)
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